Thanks Bharath and Justin -- I think I took all the suggestions and made a few other changes of my own. Here's the result.
I'm not 100% happy with the historical note in "startup process", mostly because it uses the word "name" three times too close to each other. Didn't quickly see an obvious way to reword it to avoid that.
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