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Re: 7.4 release news item on postgresql.org

From: Josh Berkus <josh(at)agliodbs(dot)com>
To: "Merlin Moncure" <merlin(dot)moncure(at)rcsonline(dot)com>,<pgsql-advocacy(at)postgresql(dot)org>
Subject: Re: 7.4 release news item on postgresql.org
Date: 2003-12-04 18:38:46
Message-ID: 200312041038.46203.josh@agliodbs.com (view raw or flat)
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Merlin,

> Here are my suggestions:
> The first sentence is a non sequitur.  It states postgres was released
> due to having a large number of enterprise features, while the intended
> meaning is to imply a long testing period.
> The word 'enterprise' should not be in quotes because it does not
> normally appear in quotes.  Quotation marks imply a user inferred
> meaning that differs from the normal one.  In this case it implies
> triteness (at least to me).
> The personal pronoun 'our' does not belong here.
> 'Click download links above to download it' is better stated as 'The new
> version is available in the download section' (perhaps with a 'located
> above' tacked on to the end).

Thanks, but a critique doesn't do us much good if you don't supply alternate 
text.  How about you just re-write the paragraph and I'll post it?

-- 
-Josh Berkus
 Aglio Database Solutions
 San Francisco


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